Here’s the photo prompt for Friday Fictioneers courtesy of Madison Woods. Thanks Madison, for starting and continuing this wonderful writing prompt. Please visit her site and check out all the other Friday Fictioneers. Here’s my 100 word take on the photo:
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The scent of Big Macs and fries drew them, although only he was sentient. The years of training at the monastery having paid off, so to speak.
A moth, really? He flapped his brown wings, and guessed it could be worse. He could have come back as a germ or an amoeba. At least he’d been prepared. She however, not so much. Did she see this as heaven or hell? Or was she just a moth, drawn to the light of the window, totally unaware of having been more?
He remembered the suicide vest, trigger in her hand. Speaking about her god before sending them both into the great beyond.
Suddenly a bird swooped in, grabbing her in its beak before flying off.
Karma’s a bitch.
There you go… life (and death) has a way of catching up with you. Nice one.
http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/checkin-out-the-joint-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/
Cosmic law can not be averted, hehe,
Oh dang! Indeed she is! Nice!
My attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/chasing-the-divine/
Reincarnation, suicide bomber and divine retribution – I wasn’t expecting that! I wonder who the bird used to be? Really liked your story, again.
I went to Mars :-/ : http://mysocalleddutchlife.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/moths-from-mars/
Thank you for the comments. Loved your story.
Law of Karma at work indeed. Nicely written. I am over here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/fridayfictioneers-preying-mantis/
A sentient moth. Very original, well done. This was wonderful.
You had me intrigued at the beginning and I was imagining the Buddhist monk engaged in Karma and the end was a real twist, I loved that as it made me look again.
Here’s mine for this week: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/05/25/fairys-through-the-window/
Thank you. Glad I was successful at making you give it a reread.
Sweet. Here’s mine: http://saberdragon.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/flash-friday-fictioneer-a-letter-to-illa/
I enjoyed this on several levels, as I’m sure you intended. Well done!
Kathy
http://notforallmarkets.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/beauty-in-truth/
wow, very good, love the idea of reincarnation to a moth.
what goes around comes around.
Here’s mine: http://logo-ligi.com/2012/05/25/mothballs/
Amen
Reincarnation is a great premise to use with this photo. Wish I’d thought of that. But it’s an excellent complete multi-layer story, so you develop your theme well.
Here’s my story: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/
Thank you. I love these flash fiction pieces for exactly that reason.
Gotta love Karma. such a unique take on the prompt. I really enjoyed this story.
Oh ho ho! Very nice, TE! That was great. Would that we call could see it in action.
Here’s mine: http://siobhanmuir.blogspot.com/2012/05/moths-date-100words-for.html
Siobhan
ah, lol. Feel bad for the poor Luna moth.
I loved the reincarnation theme, and especially the ending.
mine’s here http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/
Very darkly droll. Is this a strange combination of Hinduism and Islam? Although I think there occasional Hindu suicide bombers, the idea is much more strongly linked to Islam, though reincarnation as animals is a Hindu concept. Doesn’t matter really, the story is a good one.
Carlos did not read this quite right, but has seen the light now. The two moths died at the same time, but only one was the terrorist. The other was the monk. This is too good a story to nitpick. Well done.
Wow another great story. I think I want to share this one. Just because you cover three different things from one point of view and do it so seamlessly. Awesome story. Here is my little bit: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/05/friday-flash-fiction-best-hubby-ever.html
Do i love this piece…you can bet i absolutely do!
I always enjoy reading your most interesting takes on these photo prompts, Trudy! What an imagination you have.
lol Loved the ending. Very imaginative, as always, Trudy.
Fabulous, reincarnation never crossed my mind with this, really imaginative. And impressive how you thought about working in the back story ‘past life’. As above, very layered.
Wow…powerful. Karma…indeed. Deep and thought provoking. Read it a few times to get the full impact and took away different things each time. Nice work. Here’s mine: (a bit lighter)
http://www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com
Wow, never thought of reincarnation for this prompt, very good, and well written too, loved the last line.
Oh my, nice twist on various ideas about the afterlife! Karma’s definitely a bitch.
My story – http://newpillowbook.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/friday-fictioneers-losers/
No matter what your belief system, this was just a fun story. Love the last line. You can find mine at http://www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/05/rendezvous.html
Loved the idea of reincarnation and karma. Excellent take on the prompt.
For your readers here’s mine if they wish to drop by:
http://tollykitsjourney.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/moths-fridayfictioneers-flashfiction
Indeed, Karma is a bitch. Well done!
Here’s mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/flash-fiction-friday-almost/
A charming and imaginative story. Love the backstory you created for the characters. A little gem.
WOW! That was a pretty explosive take on the prompt. I can’t believe you could pack so much into this short story! Just the interesting reincarnation turmoil was enough to interest me – and then the question of the moth’s understanding her new realitiy,followed by instant Karma. What a job! Well done.
Thank you for your comments on mine!
Lindaura
For those who haven’t stopped by yet, here I am:
http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com
Loved the layered story, particularly the reincarnation and karma theme.
That was totally awesome! I loved the last line. Very, very well done!
Really clever. Great read!
Love that the scent of the Big Macs drew them. Definitely not something I would expect from moths!
I love this! And thanks for the follow. I look forward to following yours too.
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